7:56 am. Completed the final rewrite of Chapter 1... with a clear head and mind this morning. Perhaps, a few edits later, but for now I've gotten the story down as I want it written...Over half of the original was cut and rewritten. I saw so need for the flashback re-introducing Zeno from 3 years ago when that was already done in the Prologue...The flashback makes sense. Yes (for me it did) but its slowed down the current flow of the story...PaintedPeople should flow easily without distractions and flowery arrangements. I read kind of stuff and hate it...will put a down for weeks before I pick it up again.
I have become quite fond of Emmerdale Farm 1972 with star-crossed lovers Jack Sudgen and Marian Wilks. There is a triangle growing between Jack and Marian and Jack's little brother Joe...who is completely out of Marian's class. Must say, I like this little drama that plays like more like a novel. It is well written and acted...